My book read it here

[Element Lord]

ok i am writing a book called the seventh. you can read it on here. im pretty sure that it is cool because i get a lot of business distributing copies of it at my school. ok sooo... i already wrote chapters 1 and 2. once my school gets chapter 3, i will release chapter 2 on here. they already got chapter 1 and are getting chapter 2 tommorow. anyway. please post your comments on the book on this thread so i know what to do in the next few chapters. and rate the book on the pole please.

[Giiga]

I like it but u should write more becuz thats like 3 pages in a real book

[Element Lord]

i will. thats only the first chapter.

[Vipershark]

hey that was great! i didn't sat that you rock, but you need another option in the poll. i would of rated it higher!

[Element Lord]

ok here it is. it is a little longer than the lastr one. and pointless really. i just did it to make the book longer and to add a new character. this girl wouldn't stop bugging me. i use real people as inpiration for the characters. and she wanted to be in.blah blah blah. shut up element.

[Vipershark]

hey you're right. that was a space waster. it was actually pretty good though. hey is tyler and alyson supposed to be like you and that cheerleader? oh yeah check your pms. (can i put my story here or should i make another thraed to do it? i think i might make another thread but i'm not sure.

[Element Lord]

no alyson and tyler are two people that i know. not me and the girl.

[Vipershark]

oh. ok. well it sorta sounds like you and the girl because he's the wierd guy and she's the popular girl.

[Element Lord]

yeah but its not me and the girl so crap off man!!!! besides, being a cheerleader isn't all that big at my school anyway. like everybody is a cheerleader practically.

by the way. i finished the third chapter. here it is. and the forth chapter is almost done.

[Vipershark]

wow! that was good! i can't wait for chapter 4!

[Element Lord]

ok well let me finish it.

[Vipershark]

ok! go on!

[Lesjordans]

its awrite

[Element Lord]

I can't post the last chapter. My idiot mom says that its too violent. this sucks
but i will try to write my next book for this forum.

[banzaii.03]

THATS COOL!

played dude....

I dont know whether you mind me posting my story on here....

It is only a first draft...ive done the start but it aint too interesting at the moment...so ill give ya a bit of the 4th chapter....

AND KEEP ON WRITIN DUDE...that is pretty cool....

[Element Lord]

holy crap that is cool. i just read the begining and the end. what is the thing sticking out of his head?

[banzaii.03]

youl have to wait and see lol...

ill get the rest up....when...ive.....written it lol

[Element Lord]

ok here is my next book. This is called broken reborn. I hope that you like it.

[banzaii.03]

mate....you doin good...

i seriously couldnt stop readin it till id finished...

i prefer that one to the first...

keep it up

[Vipershark]

can you at least tell us what happens in the 4th chapter and then post the fifth?

[Element Lord]

ok first of all, there is no 5th chapter. 4 is the end. and now i have a website for all my books. it is www.freewebs.com/zebsbook my real name is Zeb


ok. Jase tries to shoot Tyler, but Alyson pushes Tyler out of the way and she gets hit. Tyler goes after Jase, and shoots him. Then he goes back to alyson's body and shoots himself.

[Killirbob.Exe]

ok first of all, there is no 5th chapter. 4 is the end. and now i have a website for all my books. it is www.freewebs.com/zebsbook my real name is Zeb


ok. Jase tries to shoot Tyler, but Alyson pushes Tyler out of the way and she gets hit. Tyler goes after Jase, and shoots him. Then he goes back to alyson's body and shoots himself.


Powerful...

tell me wut grade are these kids in again ..... and that is one wierd place but other wise i like it ....

[Vipershark]

wait a minute. jase kills alyson, tyler kills jase, and tyler kills himself?
wow.... broken reborn is good.....

[Vipershark]

sorry about the double post but i have decided that i will write a new story ( i like writing and doing comics) anyway, It should be really cool. I will edit it onto this post cuz i am not sure how to get attachments into my posts, (element lord, will you help?) so i will write it here. i haven't decided on a title yet so i am open to suggestions. i will probably name it myself. Ok. here it goes.

He ran. All he could do was run. The local gang of bullies was picking on him again. But he really didn't care about them that much right now. All he could think about was the note. The note a boy named tyler,who was in his class, threw to him that afternoon. It was a badly written note that looked like it was written quickly. The note said: 11:00 be there or else. The password is banana. It gave directions and an address. He knew where it was, since he went there a lot. It was the corner store down the street. After hiding from the bullies, he ran home. He parked his bike on the side of his house and went in. At about 10:30, he acted tired to prepare to sneak out of his house. He didn't like sneaking out. It was easy to do it, though. He'd go out his window, which was above a little roof. from there he could get into a tree that he loved to climb. there, he could climb down to the ground. H hopped on his bike and pedalled away. Once he got to the store, he saw a dimly lit shed. He knocked on the door. "what's the password?" a big looking guy said. "banana!" the boy said. the door oopened. he saw a few kids from his class inside, along with tyler. here were some kids he didn't know. "welcome, Jacob, to our little meeting..." tyler said. "what do you want?" jacob asked. (jacob was the boy at the beginning of the story who ran from the bullies.) " well jacob, we think you hve some special powers....and we'd like to bring them out.......( if you liked that then you should like the rest of my story.)

[Element Lord]

ok. that was awesome. You should call it THE DEEPER PSYCHE cause the jacob has powers. Unless the powers dont come from his mind. then you should call it something metaforical like DIFFERENT cause jacob is different from other people.

as for the file posting thing. you have to do an advanced post. below all the writing stuff is a bar that says download attachments or sumthin like that.

and to killrbob. the kids r in 7th grade. thats why its called the seventh. really guys! check out my website. i put a bunch of cool stuff on it. it is www.freewebs.com/zebsbook

[Vipershark]

hey can you show me how to make my site really good on freewebs?

[Element Lord]

tell you what. tell me your password. I will make your site for you. just tell em what you want on it. Then once I am done, change the password. pm me the password and the username of your website (the username is the url of the site so like if the site was www.freewebs.com/it the username would be "it" ) sound good?

[Vipershark]

allright. cool. I'm gonna post more of my story here.

[SpartanKid]

i think the slain care little if they sleep or rise again

[SpartanKid]

show me on freewebs

[SpartanKid]

ur not even all that

[Vipershark]

ok. i will post more here but i'm not done writing it yet. i was writing all day at school yesterday.

[SpartanKid]

to tell you the truth i think the 2nd chapter was plain garbage. i dont see how anybody would give you a copywrite on that!!!!! Id roast you in a write off. And ya thats a challeng cuz... Holla back, its SpartanKid

[banzaii.03]

erm...spartan...maybe he didnt actually have a copyright..check spellin next time...
it was just there to show it was his ( i dont know..)

and can ya try to stay pleasent about peoples work? cos even if ya didnt like it....show HOW ya didnt like it so they can improve...

but yeah....have you written one lately?? can i read it??

and...remember no double posting dude...

[SpartanKid]

heres my story!

[SpartanKid]

itl be somewhere else

[banzaii.03]

thats pretty good dude....

[SpartanKid]

got any suggestions????

[Skeleton Lord]

wow that is good but you might wanna make your own thread for your stories it would be wise

[Element Lord]

everybody here is the second chapter of broken reborn. its not on my site yet so you can read it first here! i hope u like it i think that it is :cool:

[Vipershark]

hmm.... that was pretty good.....

[Element Lord]

it sucked i know but my miond is on something important so I cant focus very... hey look a butterfly!

[SpartanKid]

hmm i chalenge you to a write of contest. I dont see why you get all of the credit on this site. the topic is anything,anyone else who wants to hop in is welcome but this one is me against you you ten year old rookie writer!!1 holla back cuzin! DRAW YOU SWORD!!

[Vipershark]

no he's not the 10 year old, Fire element lord is.(not element lord.) i'm, gonna make a thread for this so just edit that post. (sorry.)

[SpartanKid]

the challenge is still on

[Vipershark]

then write your story and put it on the contest board.

[Element Lord]

ok i will accept as soon as some body teaches me how to use the contest board and tell sme where it is.