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Liquid Snake
04-27-2005, 05:08 PM
The following started out as lyrics for a song we had to write in Music at school, but I kinda adapted it into a poem. The title is Existance Of Zero obviously. I don't know why I titled it that, it was just the first thing I thought of...

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A lone wolf cries out into the sky,
hoping that the Heavens will hear his far cry...

His brethren below, watching him call,
knowing that eventually, the wolf will fall...

Suicide is tempting, the wolf prays for a gun.
His greatest wish is to be burnt by the Sun...

Little does the wolf know, that soon he will rise.
Rising above all, almost souring into the skies...

But the wolf is unaware of this, nothing else matters.
In a spiral of shame, his life is in tatters...

The wolf wants to leave, but the exit is blocked.
The wolf is missing a key, and the door to death is locked...

He envies the dead, he spits on the living.
God help the wolf, the wolf of Zero...

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Don't know whether it's any good or not, it doesn't really have an ending or anything, it's just about a wolf who can't stand his life...o_O

yan-bayan
04-27-2005, 05:15 PM
thats really good, you wrote it youreself alone?

Liquid Snake
04-27-2005, 05:37 PM
Yeah...Surprised? Lol...

HRBEK
04-28-2005, 10:07 AM
Very well done. Where did you learn poetry, or did you just write it off the top of your head?

Thanks,
HRBEK.

Liquid Snake
04-28-2005, 07:10 PM
Didn't learn poetry as such, just wrote if off the top of my head...Thanks for the comments people...:) I wrote another one today. Dunno if it's as good as Existance Of Zero or not, I was pretty pissed off when I wrote this one lol...Thought I'd post it anyway though;

Empty Wounds

Emotionless, I fade into the black.
This pain is like someone stabbing me in the back...

Time is against me, the angels are looking down.
Satan looks up, wearing his filthy crown...

The heat of the flames, the burn of the fury,
the demons in my nightmares, wielding all the glory...

Heaven won't take me, and Hell is closing in.
The pain is insane, making me rip my skin...

I think I'm somewhere in the middle,
or is this just part of God's insane riddle?

The divine, the satanic, the good and the bad.
Who gives a f*ck, it's all so sad...

There's nothing left, there's nothing there,
so leave me alone, alone with the despair...

Cid Highwind
04-28-2005, 08:46 PM
You know there really is a sort of religion about Existance of Zero as you put it, or better said, Nihility. It's very interesting, a bit devious but it could be true..

Liquid Snake
04-29-2005, 04:56 PM
You know there really is a sort of religion about Existance of Zero as you put it, or better said, Nihility. It's very interesting, a bit devious but it could be true..

Really? Lol, I was unaware of this...Weird coincidence, but I might check this out...

I wrote yet another poem...:P I'm on kind of a poem-writing frenzy here...There seems to be a lot of inspiration surrounding me, and since school is more boring than ever at the moment, I just write poems in class...

Bleed Alone

An act of mercy, an act of glory.
These motherf*ckers are building up the fury...

Like a damned greedy snake,
all these idiots do is take...

Annoying f*ckers, and greedy fools,
using us like a bunch of tools...

I can't take much more of this, I just want to die.
These pr!cks are killing me, I want to know why...

Sometimes I wish I was deaf and blind,
then there'd be a chance of the morons being kind...

They're tearing me apart, they're wasting me away.
Somebody kill me, I don't want to stay...

Everywhere I look, everywhere I turn,
I see another d!ck who deserves to burn...

I need a knife to gouge out my eyes,
I don't care if anybody cries...

If you see my corpse, remember to say 'wow',
because I just can't wait for Apocalypse Now...

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o_O Another suicide poem...:P

TK 421
04-30-2005, 12:34 AM
whoh your awesome!!! i have been doing a little bit of random writing lately. i find it easier to write off the top of your head. i havent studied either. maybe we should post our poetry here. well this is my one anyways, i did it last night:

Cut in half like a knife though paper, shattered is my heart
Dreaming, my only escape, escaping from reality and the truth
The truth hurts, hurts like a knife through a shattered heart

Cut to pieces I am, ripped and stolen is my heart, taken without warning
Time may heal, but what wounds? The appearance of the attacker was known
Not knowing how such a little thing can rip you and your heart
My heart and my soul hurts, hurts like a knife through a shattered heart

Fixing is hard, cut these are scars, burns and menacing memories
The past gets you, your faith is sealed and you will never stop it from its hands
Its hands will take you, rip you and shatter you
Rip your skin and shatter your soul like a knife through a shattered heart

My soul, was there, out in the open, ready for taking
Your soul is you, look after your soul as if you lose your soul, you lose yourself


Do not laugh as I am hurt and shattered, shattered like a knife through a shattered heart and a stolen soul

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weird eh? i was pretty p!$$ed off yesterday

PøinŦ Çataclsym
04-30-2005, 03:40 AM
i got one about dragons but im not sure ne one wants to here it...

HRBEK
04-30-2005, 09:48 AM
Post it. No one here will be too harsh if it isn't good. I'd like to hear it, it sounds OK from the topic that it regards (Dragons).

Thanks,
HRBEK.

Liquid Snake
04-30-2005, 12:52 PM
Thanks for the comments guys...Lol, I normally spend a while writing some of these poems. I like to read them to myself to see if they 'flow', if you get what I mean...

Hey Fistface, that poem you wrote isn't bad...I like the words in it...:) [DRG], post the poem. Like HRBEK said, we won't be too harsh if it isn't too good. We'll just give out some constructive critisism...That way you can improve your writing in future. :)

Soba
04-30-2005, 04:08 PM
^.^
I love 'Existance of Zero'.
You should write a story to go along with it, add a little more to go.

Liquid Snake
04-30-2005, 04:27 PM
Heh, thanks...I might write a story to go with it perhaps, depends if I can think of one...:P

HRBEK
04-30-2005, 04:53 PM
She has a point. You should write a story to go with it. Stories are easy to write if you agree with what you are writting. Try to relate it to something that may have happened to someone before. Without plagiarising someone elses work, if you read over books that you can relate to your poem, there is no end to what you can come up with.

Your poems are good. I am terrible with poetry. If you don't want to write a story that is fine, but it is something that you really should consider. If the story is as good as the poem, I'll be reading!!!

Thanks,
HRBEK.

Liquid Snake
04-30-2005, 05:04 PM
Lol, thank you HRBEK...:) What mainly inspires my poems are people around me at school and the music I listen to...If I think of a story, I'll be sure to post it. :D

PøinŦ Çataclsym
04-30-2005, 05:22 PM
ok here goes nothin...and it was for LA and i was bored so dont laugh

DRAGONS ARE COMING

Flash of claws,
Gleam of teeth.
Trail of death
In their wake

Dragons are coming,
Utter domination.
Dragons are coming,
Death of the earth

The red hint of blood,
The darkness of death.
The domination of dragons
None shall rest

Many warriors come to stand,
All destroyed by the dragon’s hand

Many seek to destroy the source,
All crushed by the dragons force

One warrior stands bold,
Sword in hand, destroys a dragons
Chaotic wrath

The onset of a great battle begins,
Led by the slayer of dragon skins

A war rages on, the death of humanity.
The dragons rule
With an iron-fist

Dragons are coming,
A trail of death.
Dragons are coming,
The earth is gone.

Flash of claws, gleam of teeth
The dragons rest,
But do not sleep….

Now the dragons rule,
All is lost.
They’ve taken away
All we trust

No warrior stands
To fight this threat.
All of us are doomed
To death

A dragon roars,
Its body falls.
A warrior has risen
To fight bloody brawls

A dragons tooth
Is his sword.
A dragon’s scale
Is his shield

He fights the intimidating
Dragons roar,
Destroys them all
Before they soar.

We all return
From the world below,
To see no smoke,
And no dragons alive

This warrior stands
Noble yet even
Today.

The dragons finally rest….

Inspired by: Eragon and the Dragon lance series

By:
‘the raving dragon fanatic’

ok there ya go...its not that good

Liquid Snake
04-30-2005, 05:26 PM
Wow...Man, you shouldn't put yourself down like that, I think it's really good...:D It's fairly long, but there's nothing wrong with that. It's good man...

The Latias Master
04-30-2005, 05:27 PM
Do you make them up as you write them or do you already have them planned?

Liquid Snake
04-30-2005, 05:31 PM
If you are asking me, I make them up as I write them...I basically just think about stuff that happens to me, and certain songs by bands and stuff...I seem to be able to find a lot of inspiration, and I basically convert my thoughts into poems...

HRBEK
04-30-2005, 05:48 PM
You shouldn't be so pessimistic. Your poem was good [DRG] Master.
Keep it up!!!

Thanks,
HRBEK.

PøinŦ Çataclsym
04-30-2005, 06:58 PM
wow....i thought it would be horrible. i just put ideas down as i went along

HRBEK
04-30-2005, 08:26 PM
As long as you enjoy writting something, it should always come out okay, or even better.

Thanks,
HRBEK.

Liquid Snake
04-30-2005, 08:49 PM
^ Yeah, what HRBEK said...It's a decent poem...:)

PøinŦ Çataclsym
05-01-2005, 12:09 AM
i guess it is....i hope my LA teacher thinks the same as u

HRBEK
05-01-2005, 01:39 AM
They will, it's good. Unless they have issues of course.

Thanks,
HRBEK.

PøinŦ Çataclsym
05-01-2005, 02:17 AM
ummm...wellll...now that u mention that......ummmm.....ya....

HRBEK
05-01-2005, 03:15 AM
What's wrong with them? Anyway, what inspirations did you have to write it? Have you ever learned poetry at school? I have but I suck at it.

Thanks,
HRBEK.

Liquid Snake
05-01-2005, 12:14 PM
Lol, yet another poem here...o_O

Industrialised

Wake up, get up, take a look around you.
What do you see? A world that is new...

It may look good, and it's not obsolete,
but it'll throw you down on the f*cking concrete...

Humans, machines, it'll end up in a war.
Both sides emitting a sadistic roar...

There is no hope, the crime is evolution.
Now look what's happened, a big revolution...

Armoured skeletons, the shine of the chrome.
And then there's the humans, hiding in the dome...

They will win, we will lose.
The Government appears, creating a ruse...

Lies, deceit, there's no escape.
Murder, torture, even rape...

Zero survivors, zero tolerence,
these machines don't have a concience...

Hunt, destroy, maim and kill.
Those're the orders, they have no will...

Millions wounded, millions dead.
This is the future, it's all blood red...

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A huge inspiration for this came from Fear Factory...Mainly their song H-K (Hunter-Killer)...Still trying to think of a story for the Existance Of Zero poem guys...:P

HRBEK
05-04-2005, 11:46 AM
That's real good. You're in the highest English class aren't you?

Thanks,
HRBEK.

Liquid Snake
05-04-2005, 04:56 PM
Lol, thank you...Yeah, I'm in the highest English group...Lucky me...:P

TK 421
05-05-2005, 02:44 AM
heh im the same. i writing a story of the thoughts of a guy while he's in a coma.
anyways i wrote this a week ago or somethin

i dont like it here.
take me. anywhere. anywhere but here.
its scary, cold and dark.
dark like black and cold like ice.
take me please, i dont like it here
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just something small thats in my sig

HRBEK
05-05-2005, 10:19 PM
I wish I knew what people in comas were thinking......

Thanks,
HRBEK.