~Felly~
01-13-2006, 10:00 PM
I need your opinion on this story. It's for my english class, and please rate it on a scale of 10. Thanx! **This is in my point of view too.**
Characters-Audra (that's me, which is my real name), Jamie, Bailey, Mike M., Mike R., and Kyle.
Setting-The school, out in my neighborhood, and the bookstore
Prologue-Audra and her friends like to play games and write stories of their own. One day, they went to buy a fantasy book. Each and every day, they read a chapter. What will happen to their world when they finish? Read to find out.
I was waiting for my friends, Mike M., Mike R., Jamie, Bailey, and Kyle. I'm more of the talkative and quiet type. Bailey can be quite talkative, but she can be quiet sometimes. Jamie's really quiet and talks rarely. Mike M. is very talkative. I think he was born talking. Mike R. is quiet, but he'll talk a lot if he wants to. Kyle likes to start fights, but I'm usually there to stop him. I sat down, and I started to get bored. Bailey came 5 minutes later.
"Took you long enough!" I exclaimed.
"Sorry, stupid." Bailey said.
That's where it ends so far, but I'm not done yet. Rate for what it is so far, then I'll continue.
Characters-Audra (that's me, which is my real name), Jamie, Bailey, Mike M., Mike R., and Kyle.
Setting-The school, out in my neighborhood, and the bookstore
Prologue-Audra and her friends like to play games and write stories of their own. One day, they went to buy a fantasy book. Each and every day, they read a chapter. What will happen to their world when they finish? Read to find out.
I was waiting for my friends, Mike M., Mike R., Jamie, Bailey, and Kyle. I'm more of the talkative and quiet type. Bailey can be quite talkative, but she can be quiet sometimes. Jamie's really quiet and talks rarely. Mike M. is very talkative. I think he was born talking. Mike R. is quiet, but he'll talk a lot if he wants to. Kyle likes to start fights, but I'm usually there to stop him. I sat down, and I started to get bored. Bailey came 5 minutes later.
"Took you long enough!" I exclaimed.
"Sorry, stupid." Bailey said.
That's where it ends so far, but I'm not done yet. Rate for what it is so far, then I'll continue.