ho-oh the story not an rpg

[regis]

i woke up one morning and i remembered what day it was i was getting my s.s.anne ticket so i ran and ran to the port i got a ticket but i saw another person it was steven he had a strange ticket then i could see the words on it it said Mystic Ticket i asked him if i could borrow it he said sure keep it
i think its a fake anyway i gave it to the captain o was he surprized he said this was a ticket to a far-away islnad it thrills my blood so i went there
strangely i have heard about this place it was Navel Rock so as i adventured there was to pairs of ladders i went for the left one as i went up i saw a ledgendary pokemon HO-OH i went up i sent out latios and latias it i attacked it with phycic from latios latias's attack missed as it was a slow solar beam altho magma grunts came they where hurting ho-oh i sent out charizard and used flamethrower at the grunts they retreated i threw a ultra ball cathing
ho-oh i sailed back to a pokecenter and there i had the ledendary pokemon HO-OH

THE END





please rate this out of 10.

[blaze546]

i say that is a little short. but it was good. i give it 5. ;)

[Invisible Shadow]

I say 1 out of 10, very, very, very short.

[Vipershark]

0. That sounds more like a description of something to doin a game than a story.... no dialogue, (well unless you count that half dialogue by steven) no many details, doesn't make a lot of sense, (how'd the magma grunts get there?!?!?!?!) and you shoulda caught Lugia too......... I'd do a better version, but I don't have time.

[regis]

the magma grunts came behind me anyway the other stories are what 5 sentances longer?