My life. All in a poem.

Every day Ill do a poem about what that day was like, but ill start off from a couple of years ago. Ill be on holidays from monday for 2 weeks so I will miss that.

Heres my first part:

Two years ago at the age of 9,
I went to my Grandads to sat Hi!
But when I got there I was shocked,
Because my Grandad had passed on,
I sat there and cried,
And rang my Mum to here her cry,
Then I was stertled by a loud noise,
He snores and started to arise,
Hes alive I shouted,
But he was sleep walking,
And didnt here me loudly talking.

You probably dont care what happens in my life but I can put in funny parts. Anyway dont close this

[HRBEK]

There's nothing wrong with it, but it's a little hard to understand near the end.

Thanks,
HRBEK.

[Laguna Loire]

Ehh...Just my opinion, but I don't really like that one you posted man...Just doesn't 'flow' well when I read it...o_O But post another one anyway...

[Invader_gir]

nah, but its still pretty funny =P
like to see how the mum handled it

Mad mad and mad! Ill do another one soon thats funnier

[Sister of Metal]

please do that in the 'get your poem rated' thread, else we'll have these one poem threads everywhere..thank you