Ireprable Damage

[Antownee]

A short poem I made

I
Right now I'm sad, I live to die
The power of pain, I need not try
But to fall and fail, wither and pale.

II
Theres somthing wrong, needless to say
It slowly eats me, day by day
Piercing my heart, stop I pray

III
I'ts becoming worse, I can feel it within
I beg it to stop, but its determined to win
I let it all go, i can no longer manage
Here I lie, irreperable damage.

Anthony Redmond

[Laguna Loire]

Mmm, this could've gone in the "Get your poem rated" thread, but nonetheless...

Excellent! Great poem mate, well done. Though, it's spelt [B]irreperable[/B]...yeah, I have to find something to pick at, or else it'd be perfect. I havn't written for a while...got no damned inspiration...

[Antownee]

Cheers changed it
TY =)