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Irreperable Damage
A short poem I made
I Right now I'm sad, I live to die The power of pain, I need not try But to fall and fail, wither and pale. II Theres somthing wrong, needless to say It slowly eats me, day by day Piercing my heart, stop I pray III I'ts becoming worse, I can feel it within I beg it to stop, but its determined to win I let it all go, i can no longer manage Here I lie, irreperable damage. Anthony Redmond Last edited by Antownee; 09-18-2005 at 06:00 PM.. |
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Mmm, this could've gone in the "Get your poem rated" thread, but nonetheless...
Excellent! Great poem mate, well done. Though, it's spelt [B]irreperable[/B]...yeah, I have to find something to pick at, or else it'd be perfect. I havn't written for a while...got no damned inspiration... |
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Cheers changed it
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